Thanks for the update! And nice work on this. The motion looks smooth and flat. I’d rather see what you’re seeing, i.e. smooth motion with most of the notes correct, than jumpiness. You’ve surpassed the first and probably largest hurdle most people face with this.
The main thing I’m noticing is that your fingers are dragging a little. This can be an indication that the motion is not centered, and is too radial. In other words, the midpoint of the motion, let’s say, if you place your pick against the middle string of the three-string group, your thumb should almost be pointing straight in line with the radius. This means that the other fingers will not be pointing straight - they’ll be slightly ulnar. Or “rightward”, as I like to think of it.
This is your midpoint orientation. Your wrist will have a slight ulnar bend to it. If that gives you too much edge picking, then adjust your approach angle (i.e. arm position) until you get the edge picking you want. Don’t mess around with the thumb more than a slight bend either way. If you feel like you have to bend your thumb all the way around your index finger to get the edge picking you want, then you have no range of motion left if you ever need to adjust it.
When you play a downstroke on the highest string of the pattern, your wrist will now be even more ulnar. When you play an upstroke on the lowest string of the pattern, your fingers will approximately be straight in line with the ulna but not actually radial. In the supinated form of this motion that you’re using, it never goes radial. In fact, the actual range of motion of the wrist is not symmetrical - it is more ulnar than radial. So what you are doing here really is centering it, even though it may not look or feel like it.
When you do this, this should get the fingers out of the way. If it doesn’t, try using more grip exposure (visible pick) and using more of a fixed amount of wrist extension to set the attack depth. Just as an example of how these two variables work together, this is what more exposure and more extension, with the slightly more centered motion looks like:
You don’t have to use as much exposure and as much extension as I’m using here - this is just an example of how this works. This is locked in and doesn’t change. Motion takes place from that baseline. Now you can do a full extension movement and go as ulnar as you like and nothing hits the body. The pivot point is the watch band area of the wrist, or the center of the two eminences - depending on where you are anchoring.
While you are doing this, I would try a couple different grips - either more extended index finger (thumb more toward index pad), or less extended (thumb closer to inde middle knuckle), just to see if that does anything. For me, using a middle knuckle grip tends to shut off the finger motion, allowing me to focus more on getting the wrist motion correct.
Again, nice work here, this is really just a simple change to center the motion. In general, try not to put too much time into any of this. If after a few tries with tiny little tweaks you don’t see any demonstrable improvement when you film yourself, that usually means there is something bigger, simpler, and more fundamental that is not working and needs to be adjusted or moved differently. Feel free to post more frequently if that’s the case - the more time we can save you, the better.
FYI I dropped these in Final Cut and sped them back up 600%. It’s always helpful to check out the normal speed because that’s where the motion shape and the sound of the actual playing are most apparent. If you do any more, just link the normal speed version in addition to the slow.
Again, nice work here - keep it up.